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    dots Submission Name: "Smile"dots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots"Smile"dots
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    "Smile," they say to me.
    "But I am," i reply kindly.

    "Not all smiles come
    In overdone exposure,
    Not all happiness comes
    In singing overture.
    Not all are sad,
    Some happy tears are cried.
    Joy is not upon the corner of my lips,
    Sometimes it's there in my eyes.
    Stare not hard at my brow,
    It may never point down.
    Happiness may not be in a smile,
    But mine's in the absence of a frown."

    They look at me confused
    And a little irked.
    Istare at them proud
    And ease a tiny smirk.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Ygi. I totally thought I was about to read something depressing, but this is really witty, and I totally understand. I have a few perky people in my life who really just don't get it. It's also very easy to read. It flows very well.

    Nice job.

    ~Venia
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very very good, I liked it alot. I was hesitant to click on it, I saw the title "smile". I could almost imagine the piece I was about to read, it would of been a painful read, about how you "fake" a smile for people, or can't smile anymore, or something that i've heard a million times like that. Sure, those poems can be good, but we've all read them already. However, I was pleasently suprised to find a witty little poem, with a nice character to it. Props man, I think I'm gonna favourite this [censored]. I really liked it ;-p.
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. It's simple, but there's a hint of a deeper meaning there. I like the format, and the words sound natural, like a simple conversation. Great job :)

    -Stevey
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]


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