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    dots Submission Name: To Be or Not to Bedots
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    Author: Maki
    ASL Info:    17/ female/ home
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 208/210/69
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I came up with a prompt to give my writer's club
    because about a month ago was HIGH stress for most students. A lot of my friends were having issues and it was really hard to look at everyone and say " it's going to get better."

    So, for my Prompt I said,
    Write a Monologue or Poem that says:

    "To be or not to be, that is never/not the question"
    or
    "To be or not to be, that is the last thing he/she said to me"

    And the prompts are due this Thursday, im so anxious to hear everyones ideas!

    Please critique.


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    dotsTo Be or Not to Bedots
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    To be or not to be...
    Is not the question I ask myself every night.
    I do not bend at the bathroom floor
    To pick at the blade from my razor.
    I do not drag it across my skin
    Just to feel "relief."
    And when I get a bad grade
    I do not hide, Nor do I ignore,
    That something needs to be done
    and fix it with help-
    That I asked for Myself.

    To be or not to be
    Is not the question I ask myself every day.
    When something goes wrong,
    Between a friend and me,
    And she wont work it out
    I give her space and let her think.
    I do not borrow a Pill or two
    And run to the bathroom
    To ease my troubled mind.

    To be or not to be
    Will never Be the question
    When I ask myself what I want.
    To be all I can be
    Is always the answer to
    What can I be?

    That, Is the Question.




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      2B or not 2B. Don't know if you've heard that joke. This is indeed another anti-depressive anti-suicide poem that's pretty rare now..considering 3/4 of most "poems" now are suicide/angst/dead inside, whatever.
    A nice prompt. Maybe I should try it when I'm not going vis-à-vis with my math homework.

    To be or not to be
    Will never Be the question
    When I ask myself what I want.
    To be all I can be
    Is always the answer to
    What can I be?

    That, Is the Question.


    The ending is the best part, I got distracted a little at the front, but somehow it always seems to reeel the reader back into the write instead of complaining about how cliché To Be or Not to Be really is. Maybe Hamlet's overused.
    Macbeth Revolution ^ ^

    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that, if it's an anti-suicide poem! I wanted to suicide once when I was 16 (never told anyone till recently) but I was too smart... I was going: "What is this? I must be crazy!" But it was really there, the urge, complete with imagery and various arguments to justify it. I tried to research it recently (because it is a subject in some poems around here) but all I can find out is that an adrenal gland hormone is associated with that state of mind .... more to learn here and I wish it was better understood by everybody! Your experience seems to be that of wisdom!
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with IBI about the punctuation of that line. I was also confused there.
    On another note, I like the gradual diminishment of the stanza lengths. it has an orderly, thought-out feel to it once it is looked at and considered.
    I don't think there is really anything else to say about the piece that your first poster didn't give voice to.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I was a bit hesitant when I first came across the title of this poem. "Uh oh, another Hamlet fan picking over a tired line." But instead, I am very happy to say that I enjoyed this idea as your prompt! The only real thing I have an issue with would be these lines...

    "To be or not to be
    Will never Be the question
    I ask myself what I want."

    The place where I find myself confused is the last line between the ideas that "To be or not to be" is not the question, so what is this 'what I want"? Some sort of punctuation or clarification is needed there. Other than that, I'd wonder why "be" is capitalized in the second line. Anyhow, I hope the responces to your prompt will be even more interesting than your own take. ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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