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    Author: kelli rae
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    In you I see my reflection,
    A gloating ghost- transparent,
    Shifting in the winds direction.
    Loving you is vanity,
    But hating you is worse
    Obsession leads to insanity
    And a breathless fatal state.
    We resist each other
    in your substanceless depths.
    I emerge and each drop
    Of you -
    Falls from my skin.
    Every finger print,
    Echoes through a purity,
    And smears any clear sense.
    Footprints left on the path
    fade away
    and you remain- still,
    Full but empty.





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