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Sestina - Night's Greed


Author: deathbroken
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My very first Sestina. The words i HAD to use were:
Embrace, Night, Deep, Dance, Shadows and SALADS. Ain't easy...


Sestina - Night's Greed



The stars glisten riotously in the night,
like beautiful figures dancing.
The soft melody brought by nature embraced
the poignant little hill. Shadows
of the dancing trees echo deeply
through the garden salads.

The moon opaque like the sauce from salads,
a round ball resting deep
inside the skies. Clouds tenderly embracing
the delicate beauty. The shadows
sneaking up onto the picturesque night.
As the flowers and trees dance.

Her eyes sparkled as her feelings dances.
Her smile poignant like shadows.
Her feelings resting deep
inside her, yearning to join the night.
A stunning gown, the hue of salads
clung on her curves, like an embrace.

The darkness of the harmonious skies embraced
her delicately like how lettuces are in salads.
She felt a desire roar deep
inside her. She imagined herself dancing
together with the stars in the night.
While her audience were the inquisitive shadows.

She remembered the haunting shadows
in her dreams. But while she was here in the night
her anxiety was soon eradicated, her heart danced
with anticipation, a sour taste of salads
twinge in her mouth as she felt the embrace
of the remarkable night deepened.

Her yearning to join the stars only deepened
as she continued to stare. They mixed like salads
in a dark black bowl. Clouds hover above her, their shadows
bringing her into a divine embrace.
Oh how she wished she could augment and dance
together with the stars, skies and night.

Relinquish on the night, whispered the shadows.
Don’t fall in too deep; don’t fall into its embrace
Dance away, don’t look back, gown twirling with the colors of salads.




Submitted on 2007-03-06 08:20:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  haha...what is a "Sestina"?
you pulled off the salad part barely but you did it.
*wonders in amusement*
i have never come across someone having to use salad in their piece...
it would have been a really nice one if you didnt have to use salad as all the other words conjure up a strong and nice image.
*shakes head*
why salad?
| Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
  lovely, you must really love salads though lol!
| Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by sir james | [ Reply to This ]


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