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    dots Submission Name: Butdots
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    Author: Swimming Bird
    ASL Info:    31/m/AR
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 92/90/27
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1040
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       Thought I'd try something small for my first submission.


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    My heart is small
    But my love abounds
    My mind has potential
    But to it Wisdom frowns
    My life's full of kindness
    But my changes aren't any
    My desire is one
    But that's one too many




    Submitted on 2007-03-06 10:51:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this. I'm not sure what else to say..... sometimes when things are shorter it lets the reader think more and determine their own feelings towards it, instead of just giving alot of information but not getting through. Very good
    --kim
    | Posted on 2007-07-12 00:00:00 | by chemberdan | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. short and sweet:) And something ive felt way too many times.

    Thanks for the comment on my work. and I really like all of yours, nothing i would change. keep it up?

    ~flora~
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds near self depricative catullan, have you read any of His works by chance?
    Even Ovd like as the intro and first tales of the metamophesies.

    Why start off so small?
    Simple and useful. I can relate man.
    be well.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Yariel Alvarado | [ Reply to This ]


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