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Submission Name: Love You dots

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Author:	bubble_popper15
ASL Info:	17, f, in his arms
Elite Ratio:	4.09 - 141/101/32
Words:	64

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	171
Average Vote:	4.5000
Bytes:	338

Description:
I wrote this for my ex-boyfriend! Loser....

Love You dots

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You hate me, but I love you
You desert me, but I follow you
You tell me to leave you alone, but I won't
You don't need me, but I need you
You hate me, but I love you
You hate me, but I love you
You hate me, but I love your best friend
You thought I was serious, but I fooled you!

Submitted on 2007-03-06 12:28:17 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  Uhm...I think Martin (the comment below this one) forgot to read the last 2 lines of the poem. I would have to agree with him about the first part though; It did seem stalkerish. Hmm...thats cool though, I'm down with stalkers;).

SAM
| Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]
   Seems like you would follow this person to the abodes of a dark abyss. Even if he wants rid of you for good. Seems like a lot of emotion is in here, or maybe phsycobabble in a stalkerish manner. Not really sure on that.

Perhaps the reason why the person wants to get away is because you're to close to him/her but to far away in some things. Not sure, a lot can be implied here, and a lot of things can be assumed. So I'm just stating my opinion on the things I see in this poem.

Well, one day maybe you can get over your problems, and let the dead rest. I don't mean dead as in actually dead, just lost things. Just move on with your life, and stop looking in the past.

Have a nice day....
Martin
| Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
  THis is a great poem!!! You tell that loser angel!!!! Great job!!!
| Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by Granger | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a pretty good poem... for a beginner! Cause my poems are so much better check mine out! Once I post them! OK!? Well I think the part about you loving the dude's best friend is kinda retarded! SORRY, But it is!
| Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by PrincessKrisen | [ Reply to This ]
  it's like that scene from a midsummer night's dream except not
| Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  Lol That was great.....
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i started out really annoyed at how cliché this poem was but once i read the end i laughed and changed my mind.
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]
  Thanx for responding to my poem "I'm Thanking You Now" In return I think this poem is sooooo cute. "Especially You desert me, but I follow you" LOL Been there & done that keep up the neat work peace & stay safe...
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  lol this is cool..you go girl!!! tell that loser!!
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by foxy lee | [ Reply to This ]

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