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    dots Submission Name: Secret Gardendots

    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSecret Gardendots

    I sometimes like to take walks at night
    In a garden secret from all but me
    It illuminates under the stars and moonlight
    A feast for the eyes, a sightful to see

    The flowers that bloomed in the dark
    Intoxicates me with their fragrance
    As I take my steps inside the mystic park
    I feel time losing it's importance.

    Pacing under the star-spilled sky
    I brush past sweet orchids that glow
    Lost in the beauty, I reach a new high
    Mesmerized in this peaceful flow.

    But when I think of the joy you bring
    Or of your beauty that shines so true
    Then this garden, you know, means not a thing
    Nothing, if I compared it to you.

    Submitted on 2007-03-06 13:12:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see where your going with this poem,
    and I like it. Good poetry makes people who read it feel good inside and other poets wish they wrote it. Keep'em coming.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      You know i felt like i could see what you see through your eyes just by reading this.
    You gave the reader a good image through this piece.
    The flow was spot on and the meaning was a beautiful way of how someone makes you feel well done salute
    | Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. I actually don't know any other word to describe this, but that one. While reading this you descirbed the most perfect, beautiful and memorizing place in the world. The images that flowed through my head were gorgous. You were very good with the details. And I have to admitt, I didn't think that this was about love, but it was the perfect way to descirbe how much love you have in your heart for someone.

    Beautiful, absolutely beautiful.

    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this write, very nice. I think everyone has one of these and I'm glad that you wrote about yours, I've written about mine. Your's is a Garden, Mine a Street. Awesome. Just Awesome.

    Now, there were some thing that slightly nagged at my head though, the rhyming with words that sound like they shouldn't be rhymed together.

    Anywho, I have to go. Thank you.

    - Kyle B.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      o my!!
    i really like your poem
    as i read it I actually started to "walk in my own garden" it was actually refreshing....then it caught me off gaurd when you put ........

    "Then this garden, you know, means not a thing
    Nothing, if I compared it to you."

    and i thought omg that is a really good piece

    keep it up... :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Emurc6 | [ Reply to This ]

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