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    dots Submission Name: How Does It Feel?dots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsHow Does It Feel?dots

    Has no one told you?
    Has no one cared?
    Is ther a gap in your soul,
    A big gaping whole,
    That defines the feeling,
    That leaves to laying there?
    How does it feel,
    To realize you'll love her but,
    She can never love you back,
    To know-- you may cry but,
    She'll never be able to react?
    To know you lost her--
    Just by a slip of breath,
    To know-- she's closed her eyes,
    For her final rest...

    Submitted on 2007-03-06 13:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. That's great. Makes me wish that I could write like that. ^ ^
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by DepressedAuthor | [ Reply to This ]
      O.O Wow! That's deep, man. Have you entered this in any contests? I think you should Go for it, bro!
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Ryu Saiashi | [ Reply to This ]
      that's kinda sad.. but it was really good!
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]

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