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    dots Submission Name: Wieghtdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsWieghtdots
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    Weigh your thoughts on the scale,
    It is a test of pass or fail,
    You have no choices,
    You have no options,
    But other peoples' voices,
    Are up for adoption,
    You have to weigh your mind,
    How heavy are your thoughts,
    Didn't you just find,
    Something you shouldn't ought,
    That is what you have to do,
    I have one question for you,
    Why does the truth hurt so much?
    Weigh yourself on the scale,
    Are your thoughts as heavy as mine?
    It is a test of pass or fail,
    What troubling things will you find?
    My own thoughts are a spore in me,
    My troubles just don't cut, they bore in me,
    So in the mirror I don't glare,
    I stare foreignly,
    And then the paranoia,
    Digs down to the core in me




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    ||| Comments |||
      Completely orginial but like GARMONBOZIA commented that spelling was the only bad part. Besides that it is great. :p
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by bigothgurl | [ Reply to This ]
      GREAT IDEA FOR A POEM THE WEIGHT OF SITUATIONS, THOUGHT, AND SELF....MY ONLY REAL CRITIQUE IS THE SPELLING
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by GARMONBOZIA | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty good! lotsa ppl go through this...
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      dude i love this. its icy chill yo. cuz sometimes u find urself asking are these really my thoughts cuz they so influenced yah know


    well peace out yo

    Da Grim Reaperesss
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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