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A Dying Leaf

Author: JAcksonJr
ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56 /116 /57
Words: 52
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 841
Average Vote:    4.0000
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The structure and scheme of The Blossom by William Blake

A Dying Leaf

Wrathful, Wrathful Raven!
In the cloud filled sky
A dying leaf falls
As you haunt the graveyard
Standing still as a guard
Darkness you call

Hateful, Hateful Vulture!
In the cloud filled sky
A dying leaf falls
Same fate for all awaits
As death fills up your plate
Darkness you call

Submitted on 2007-03-06 14:50:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Even though this was short, you could feel what you wanted to say, but as 'The Conqueror' said I could not really grasp what you were trying to say. It left me want to read a bit more to find out what you ment.

Still nicely done

| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by the_truth | [ Reply to This ]
  Extraordinary words, and very powerful, but I can't quite grasp what the meaning of it all is. Maybe just an illusion to all of our ultimate fates?
At any rate, the scheme and style is interesting and I admire the allusive edge.

The Conqueror
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]

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