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    dots Submission Name: Autumn Sunsetdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I just like autumn. Living in South Carolina, I tire of the heat sometimes.


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    Draped over a brilliant autumn day
    is a gilded sunset
    streaking the blue sky with pastel purple and pink
    contrasting with the jewel toned leaves
    of amber, ruby, topaz
    and evergreen emerald needles.




    Submitted on 2004-06-09 03:29:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love colour poems and this one is awesome!
    i notice that this poem has connected with everyone here on a personal level..
    on rare days when i do ride back home at dusk, i love to watch the sunset in the rear-view mirror
    | Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't want to have autumn now, I'm glad we finally have summer here in Germany.
    but your poem is great. the colours, not just green or red, make it very vivid. you've described the sunset beautifully. no critisicm.
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I second eve1684, we are just getting the first hot days of the year here in Michigan. Just planted the garden, we were still getting frost a couple of weeks ago. But this is a beautiful wordscape of an autumn evening. They'll be back so damned soon. It'll seem like about three weeks.
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is gorgeous, sweet and sticky like molasses and yet as light as a cloud, I have one criticism; amber is not a jewel, but a resin.. similar coloured crystals are citrine, carnelian, sunstone... if you want to know of others, let me know and I'll list them, but it's honestly not imprtant, I think you'll get away with amber :)
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      autumn being my favorite season...i like this alot..your always able to paint such a beautiful pisture with few words...the first two lines are wonderful...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful imagery with all the gemstone comparisons. Autumn in South Carolina is to see perfection in nature. But I love the summer as well. Running around without a shirt, swimming and boating on the lake, watching all the half-naked girls. Yeah, I guess Summer is a lot better if you're a guy.
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      my favorite season is autumn. tends to be my season of passion... this made me miss all the beautiful colors you described. we don't really get the full-on autumn that you get back there, but there are certain places where i know to go find them. i could see all those beautiful trees as i read your poem. thanks for the glimpse of the autumn to come! i love your description of the gilded sunset draped over the autumn day! bella!
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      great imagery in this, its true about the heat down here in live in NC and it gets terribly hot almost unbearable, the colors are wonderful in autumn in the south, but i could live w/o the pine trees lol. great write
    | Posted on 2004-06-09 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      No, not everything you write is brilliant, but this was really good. So, what I'm trying to say is, relax and keep writing, but only if you enjoy it.
    | Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]


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