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    dots Submission Name: disEngagedots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       ~concocted for all those waiting for someone to lead them-live long and perspire~

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    Jean Luc Picard discussing 'the issues' plaguing 21st and 26th century civilization as he flees the Romulans and tries to shake a heroin addiction

    the world is swirling round
    the porcelain as we debate
    our protocols in numb pretense

    automatons wept oil
    and filled their tanks with tears
    bouncing like ritalin deprived
    children from event to event
    cause to cause
    pleading for the world
    to bow to our will
    our vision, our
    delusion, our
    well spring of sewage
    laden hope

    expecting miracles
    from those bequeathed
    as demigods that bleed
    as easliy as middle class
    martyrs stumbling from
    drunken alleys
    compadres to the fixed
    system of helpless ease

    don't involve me
    in this pointless circus
    hell is written in the nomenclature
    of today with the pens of men
    hardwired to disbelieve

    so what if the world boils
    and humans piss steam
    while fish rot and forests fall
    and cattle suffer the same disease
    as politicians nibbling
    the familiar tainted weed?

    we must discuss the issues
    in our finest form of
    Shakespearean melodramedia

    I'm willing to sacrifice
    my entire crew
    to avoid any hint
    of decisiveness

    damn Kirk, the hammy actor
    damn me for being flaccid

    I represent the Federation
    federales, Federal Bureau
    of Interrogation, Fed-Ex
    fedup, the dread fed
    damn it. one of them

    we could embrace
    a utopian dream
    if we were realists
    and felt real need


    jingoistic figureheads
    offer a more appealing
    themocracy than rising
    from a well fed seat

    give me leadership wedded
    to a regulatory committee
    and inbred dogmas
    designed to neuter dreams

    dear God

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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, well, Aren't you in a very powerful , awareful type of mood. Thinking can really put you in a position where you start wondering whether it be best if you were a mere imbecile or a peasant who knew nothing of what this life has truly become. I too wish for days where i simply don't want to think. But i have to, it's what makes me want to get up and say to all of those who have given up ages ago and those who haven't even opened their mouths and thoughts as yet to start think of their surroundings.

    Yes, very strong piece you have here. I also noticed you've created some of your own words such as melodramedia or maybe my dictionary is too old. lol.

    Hope you're not all red after this piece. You've steamed off a lot of energy from what i'm feeling in this piece.

    take care.

    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      Provocative, intellectual, crude, inspired
    Another crap comment but I enjoyed the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      No, thinking's bad for you and gets you into trouble...

    "Melodramedia"... cool.

    Crap comment, I know.

    And you still haven't replied to my collab I posted on your page... tsk tsk, manners...


    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]

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