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    dots Submission Name: Awaiting you.dots
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    Author: D.C.M.
    ASL Info:    18/M/TN.
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 73/107/71
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 170
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 372



    Description:
       Something random... the first part spit out of my face earler.. and I tried to force it to work... all to fail but... oh well.


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    dotsAwaiting you.dots
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    Slashing wrists and cutting vains, sliceing necks and blowing brains these are the things I'll do tonight. Because my love is out of sight. Bashing heads, and brakeing bones, throwing stones, these are the things I'll do to you if you take her away from me! Skining knees and gushing faces, cracking ribs and loosing blood. These few things, await you tonight.




    Submitted on 2007-03-06 20:16:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very interesting... the emotion's good, and the point is there... other than that it's a good write... keep it up
    love ya
    lizzie
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by babygirl09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I like it, nice work I like the visual you gave good job keep it up peace & stay safe.... -Cordell
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written okay.. I do agree with the_truth, you should split the lines up, you also have some spelling errors and in some places your rhyming is off. But the emotion and wording were really very good. Keep up the nice work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      It was rather short, unless that is what you were going for. And I suggest you split the lines up, it makes it read-able and better to look at.

    Good Luck

    ~Meagan
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by the_truth | [ Reply to This ]



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