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    dots Submission Name: Connordots
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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Lyrics/You left me
    Total Views: 597
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1123



    Description:
       Sort of written in the 3rd person from the point of view of my birth parents had they aborted me instead of placing me in an orphanage for adoption. I guess this is how I hope they would feel... But I'll never know. This song will be on the yet untitled album I am recording this year.


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    dotsConnordots
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    The story will never be told
    betrays what I know of you
    blood-soaked sheet tells the tale
    of how much I have cried

    pretending you didn't exist
    this facade is killing me
    one of us will never forget
    and keep you inside

    The less that I know
    The better I am.
    But I can't bear the guilt
    and I did what I can.
    It's the only way I know I can reach you.

    This point in my life
    We’re one in the same
    In my helpless attempt
    I accept all the blame
    I can feel it. I'll see you soon.

    The biggest regret of my life.
    Could I have fought harder?
    Would it make any difference at all?
    I don't have an answer...

    I pray every night that you'll
    forgive me.
    Cause there's no sacrifice I wouldn't make.
    To bring you back.

    This point in my life
    We’re one in the same
    A place in my heart
    I gave you a name
    I can feel it. I'll be you soon.




    Submitted on 2007-03-06 23:35:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow.... very deep.. says so much.. and although it is over, although I have read the end of this song.. I want to keep reading more.. its heart-felt... and I feel its prob so deep is because its something you have went through.. I feel thats what we all write best about is things we've been or are going through..

    ~*jackie*~

    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all welcome to eliteskills
    I hope in time you will grow to like this place and meet new people.
    there is a lot of good people who are at this site

    Now onto your song,
    since your commentary type requested is unspecified i will speak how this song made me feel,

    To tell you the honest truth it made me cry.
    Then it made me wish you were my kid. And ask you to forgive me for giving you up and if you were able to forgive me would you think about coming home.
    It's a sad yet heartfelt deep meaning song take care thankyou for the read of this piece
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]


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