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    dots Submission Name: Odiumdots
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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 515
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1130



    Description:
       Just a bitter song. That's all. This will also be on the new album.


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    dotsOdiumdots
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    Odium

    Seventh Edge




    Take my hand. See who I am.
    See through my eyes and sympathize.

    'Cause I'm breaking now.

    There's more than I was ever prepared for.
    More than I could ever see.
    I can feel the weight of the world
    and these tendancies are bearing down on me.

    How could I ever forgive you?
    Why don't you just let me be?
    Tried to be disconcerned but
    that leads me to hypocrisy.

    Free me.

    Take my side. Be petrified.
    I feel no pain. I'll bleed again.

    And I'm breaking down.

    There's more than I was ever prepared for.
    More than I could ever see.
    I can feel the weight of the world
    and these tendancies are bearing down on me.

    How could I ever forgive you?
    Why don't you just let me be?
    Tried to be disconcerned but
    that leads me to hypocrisy.

    Free me.

    Free me.

    Free me.




    Submitted on 2007-03-06 23:43:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this, what beat is going on in the backbase?
    something hard or something melodic?
    props for the Latin.
    be well
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Yariel Alvarado | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, what beat is going on in the backbase?
    something hard or something melodic?
    props for the Latin.
    be well
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Yariel Alvarado | [ Reply to This ]


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