[ Join Free! ] (No Spam mail) Join Us Writings ES Magazine Shoutbox Community Digg Mashup Mp3 Search Online Education Video Tutorials RolePlay 90% off Amazon Funny Pics Role Play Piano Music Free Videos Web 2.0 << | >> Submission Name: Vast Elende -------------------------------------------------------- Author: Porcelaine ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 867/672/243 Words: 122 Class/Type: Poetry/Nature Total Views: 158 Average Vote:    4.0000 Bytes: 921 Description:    Croatian: Bijeli slavuj sto te nose Polja lire, slijepi putnik Rudis bijesna niz bujice Ruke tvoje zvijezda rudnik Translation: White nightingale carried By fields of Lyra's and a passenger blind Rageful you dawn down your streams Your hands a star mine Croatian: o nemirna Translation: oh restless Vast Elende ------------------------------------------- Replensing beauty into stardom Seldom braces down these shores Trees and flowers veil her bracelets Down her gowns the moonlight pours Treading softly but a shadow Crimson flame her jaded eyes Crown of tears adorns her hair Glowing faintly, her disguise Bijeli slavuj sto te nose Polja lire, slijepi putnik Rudis bijesna niz bujice Ruke tvoje zvijezda rudnik Saphire torment, o nemirna You ignite a night so frail Cast your wisdom to the poor Spill the wind into your sail Earth shall cry upon your waters Write your ships a bed of foam Cobalt ink, forgotten depths Further more away from home Sorrow dreams a faint goodbye Submitted on 2007-03-07 01:34:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ] Rate This Submission 1: >_< 2: I dunno... 3: meh! 4: Pretty cool 5: Wow! ||| Comments |||   I barely read this because of the tiny and bold font..I had to look very close..It's nice! but you should make it a little bigger for people to see.. I agree with Algol46, this poem is your best written! original, different, nothing I've read before..A big 10! Very nice! | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]   This is excellent, excellent (lacking that arcane touch, for which I'm thankful for here) perfectly and wonderfully done...just a great poem...I loved it, loved it, easily one of your best! BRAVO ... BRAVO... BRAVO ... Michael | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]   hi, very good, but could be great. poe | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]   Wow I like it, nice work I like the visual you gave good job keep it up peace & stay safe.... -Cordell | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ] Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ] 1. Be honest. 2. Try not to give only compliments. 3. How did it make you feel? 4. Why did it make you feel that way? 5. Which parts? 6. What distracted from the piece? 7. What was unclear? 8. What does it remind you of? 9. How could it be improved? 10. What would you have done differently? 11. What was your interpretation of it? 12. Does it feel original? 137049 Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free 5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ] Enter your search terms Submit search form   Web www.eliteskills.com [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ] [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] . Login User Name: Password: [ Quick Signup ] [ Lost Password ] January 10 07 131,497 Poems Posted I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials [ Angst Poetry ] [ Cutters ] [ Famous Poetry ] [ Poetry Scams ] FontSize: [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]