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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 675
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    Description:
       The first song written as "Seventh Edge". Also became the first single from the 'Book of Sorrow" album. Warmly received by the college and indie radio stations, this song pretty much got us started and paved the way for any success we experienced. The piece itself is pretty self-explainitory. End of the relationship stuff...


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    You say youíll be coming back,

    But you donít know when.

    You promised me this isnít over,

    But it feels so permanent.

    You try to ease my suffering

    Try to act like my friend.

    But there are no words,

    There is no time,

    There is nothing, weíve reached the end.



    I know that time can heal all wounds,

    But too much time cuts me deeper.

    Itís hard for me to understand

    Why God wouldnít let me keep her.



    Why God wouldnít let meÖ



    I sit alone again tonight,

    And the tears will not stop falling.

    I write the words that come to mind

    And wonder why you arenít calling?



    Wonder why you arenítÖ



    I try sleeping again tonight,

    But my eyes wonít close.

    I watch as the time goes by,

    And my heart finds no repose.

    I wish I could turn back time,

    Back to when you were here.

    But I would wait forever,

    And your reasons are so unclear.



    I feel the emptiness inside,

    See indifference in your eyes.

    And thereís a part of me that died

    On the night we said our goodbyes.



    On the night we said ourÖ



    Our future holds much more than this.

    But you are looking for perfection.

    Iím sure my words youíll just dismiss,

    And Iíll be feeling this rejection.



    And Iíll be dealing with itÖ





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