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Soul Menagerie


Author: huntingjonathon
ASL Info:    31/M/San Fran
Elite Ratio:    3 - 69 /117 /61
Words: 101
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Soul Menagerie



Electrifying static singeing the
hillside of a lonely
man,

his dog barks, his rooster
crows,
his cat laps itself until
falling asleep
again;

just another day, one might
assume, or maybe
night;

the window’s closed, the outside air
hasn’t permeated or even
tried;

the barking has dissipated into
nothing,
into the noise of a
supernova heard here on
earth, and

the animals go to sleep
again
while their owner
remains
in a cage.

-jonathon shank




Submitted on 2007-03-07 02:33:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  How magical mystical vague. Are you saying that animals have more freedom than humans and that we should be more like them or something in that same vein?
I wish I wasn't so vacant. Then I'd know what this really meant.
But it sounded fancy and I liked it anyway.
| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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