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    dots Submission Name: Bleeddots
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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
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    Description:
       This was the hidden track from the 'Book of Sorrow' album. Probably the most depressing thing I've ever written. Features piano and strings only. This track as well as some of the others can be heard on the website. Sorry if any suicides are the result of listening to this this. :)


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    dotsBleeddots
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    I miss the way that you say my name.

    Nothing's ever going to be the same.

    I know it couldn't have turned out right.

    But I can't let go tonight.



    And I don't hate you.

    I don't even know who you are anymore.



    Where have you been?

    Where do you go?

    What do you think?

    What do I know?

    Is it over?

    Should I let go?

    Walk away before I bleed anymore.



    Lesson learned, but a harder way to find out.

    (I took the long road.)

    Someday, maybe I'll figure it out.

    (How we were so cold.)



    Did you try to be

    the bleeding part of me?

    I didn't want to see

    anything like this.

    Give me anything but this.



    Don't pick me up when I fall down.

    I'd rather be left there on the ground.

    Without a word, without a sound.

    I'm upside down and turned around.



    I can taste you.

    I can feel you crawling under my skin.



    What have I got?

    What do I need?

    What do you care

    whether I bleed?

    Wash away all

    my memories.

    Let me go before I bleed anymore.

    Anymore.



    Lesson learned, the hardest way to find out.

    I know I'll never figure you out.

    Bleed.




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 03:11:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes i'd have to agree shorten it up a lil besides that.. i liked it alot. it is quiet depressing... makes your reader stop and think.. made me think of old relationships that i was once hurt from... uhh its a great write tho.. keep up the good work

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i'd have to agree shorten it up a lil besides that.. i liked it alot. it is quiet depressing... makes your reader stop and think.. made me think of old relationships that i was once hurt from... uhh its a great write tho.. keep up the good work

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i'd have to agree shorten it up a lil besides that.. i liked it alot. it is quiet depressing... makes your reader stop and think.. made me think of old relationships that i was once hurt from... uhh its a great write tho.. keep up the good work

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      lol. This makes me laugh. It seems so sad, yet i don't see too much to be so sad about. It is awesome. It seems like it might make an ok song though. It still makes me laugh. i enjoyed it. if i were to offer suggestions, i would have to say to shorten in and try not to make it so pathetic, but instead make it emotional, but not pathetic. I liked it.
    - Shiboo-sama
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Shiboo-sama | [ Reply to This ]


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