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enchantment of words


Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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enchantment of words



All it takes is a smile of hope,
So take away the sadness get rid of the rope,
For today is a day we can break free,
Free your soul and let it be,
Open your life and expand your mind,
Look for your soulmate and see what you find,
When you see dont start to fall,
Grab what you have and stand so tall,
For we are all human we want the touch,
95 percent of the time we crave it so much.




Submitted on 2007-03-07 04:20:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Pretty cool...
I like it, but I do have to agree, the ending doesn't flow so well.
Keep up the writing, you're doing a great job.

Kimmi
| Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by Childe-Wrote | [ Reply to This ]
  pretty good write, the ending didn't flow so well but it was pretty good anyways. 'so take away the sadness get rid of the rope'...sadness can be so crippling, and can bind people. I'm not sure if that's what you meant there, or the sadness that leads to a rope around the neck, but either way if fits and is very deep and meaningful. I like this, but I think if you made it a bit longer, explained yourself a little more, it could be a great poem. And remember your flow.
Riley
| Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by destinedsuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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