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    dots Submission Name: Nestdots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1119



    Description:
       I wrote this poem...last year. I'm pretty sure that's when I did. It was my second poem to ever write. I lost the first one. Well the layout is kinda messed up because it wouldn't let my lines go as far as I wanted so bare with me.


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    dotsNestdots
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    The cold pelting water runs down my face
    mixing with my warm salty tears
    as I sit naked & vulnerable
    while holding my legs close to my chest.

    The tears come faster with no end in sight
    as one thing keeps repeating in my mind,
    "How could anyone love me?!
    I'm hideous & I will never be loved!"

    My heart's howling in pain.
    It sings a long & sorrowful song to deaf ears.
    I'm breaking slowly but surely.
    My heart's a bird that's looking
    for someone's loving arms to be it's nest.

    I want so badly to believe you when you say,"I love you"
    but I just cant.
    You caress my bare skin with your strong & loving hands
    but all you touch is the above.

    I want someone to hold me in their arms and say
    they'll never let me go.
    I want someone to tell me
    they love me & truely mean it.
    I want someone to make this sadness vanish &
    make their arms my heart's nest.




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 09:16:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, so I really like this. Even though you did put 'deat' instead of 'deaf'. Haha, and you are sitting right beside me, so aren't you glad I told you? Anyway, I think this is really good, and I know exactly how you are feeling. Who is this wrtten about though?
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by grrr im a rhino | [ Reply to This ]


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