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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    Description:
       another one of my early poem. It was about one of my old boyfriends who is now my bestfriend.


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    Warm tears run down my cheek
    as I think of you.
    It feels like someone's reaching inside my chest with talons
    & ripping my heart out.
    My hair hides the pain on my face
    as I sit hunched over.
    I'm so confused
    all I can think of is you.

    I miss the
    guilty pleasure.
    I miss the way
    you cared with all your heart.
    I miss the way
    you teased me.
    I miss the way
    you made me happy beyond measure.

    But all that's gone now
    & I don't know what to do.
    Everything's so cold
    with you not around.
    When you ask if I'm ok
    I have a fake smile
    Because I'm so confused
    all I can think of is you.




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