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    dots Submission Name: Have you ever...?dots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 681
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       another early poem. wrote about a guy I was with at the time. Broke up with him couple weeks later because I didn't like him anymore.


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    dotsHave you ever...?dots
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    Have you ever...
    felt so happy & filled with love
    that you felt like you could float to the heavens above?

    Have you ever...
    loved someone so much
    that you'd do anything just to feel thier touch?

    Have you ever...
    needed someone so bad
    to be without them would drive you mad?

    Have you ever...
    had your heart beat faster
    at the site of someone's face
    & longed to be wrapped in their warm embrace?

    Have you ever...
    been so in love with someone
    that you knew that they where the one?

    Have you ever...
    been at a loss of word
    you couldn't get letters or sentences to merge?

    Well,
    Have you ever?




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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes I have.
    Yes I do.

    I love this write, one typo but that can be fixed. Great flow.
    Possibly a little better word choice.
    and then there is the stanza with four lines in it. That bothered me a little bit. Other than that, great.

    Awesome,
    Kyle B.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]


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