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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 653
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 596



    Description:
       another old poem. about the same guy I wrote 'Have you ever...?' for but this one could be towards other guys I have a crush on now.


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    dotsDreamdots
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    My eyes are heavy
    as I lie down & begin to dream of you.
    I know I shouldn't
    but I do.
    I dream
    of your arms around me tight
    whispering words of love
    all through the night.
    I dream
    of your hands gently caressing me skin
    as we sit & kiss
    again & again.
    I dream
    of us laying side by side
    & praying
    that this moment never dies.
    But I wake up
    & realize that it was only a dream
    & remember that
    our love can't be what I want it to seem.




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 09:41:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Try not to use symbols in your poetry... write the words out, unless they have a meaning in the poem... (&=and)

    Other than that ... I like it, although the ideas are very simple... I like the idea of dreaming of someone you shouldn't...etc.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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