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    dots Submission Name: Inspired of Starred Coverletdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       A king and queen separated in life but bound together in Love forever ~*~
    Inspired by the poem Starred Coverlet by Robert Graves

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif


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    dotsInspired of Starred Coverletdots
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    Do not weep
    for thy separation
    Life ruled in shifting sands
    Time building mountains
    O'er which we soar
    together as the wind ~*~

    For as my sun arises
    does yours set
    So we meet
    on the horizon of our dreams
    Where the sands of time
    have stilled an ocean beach
    Where the surf
    is the beat of our hearts
    And togetherness is
    the rainbow across the sky
    The light always found
    in the gleam of our eye




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 11:30:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW!!! I haven't read something this good in quite sometime. Most people just write depressing moody crap on here. lol
    When I was reading this I felt like I was at Myrtle Beach, sun was setting and my girlfriend was sitting next to me as the wind was lightly touching our cheek.
    The way you conveyed your poem was simply amazing. The only thing I would do, this is just me, would be to split up some of the 2 paragraph. I somewhat found myself having to reread a line or two. So just to make it more easily readable.
    But definitely a great read. Good job Tiff!
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! This is very touching... although I am not separated from my husband, at times this is exactly how I feel about our love. The second stanza is perfect! Each word with such poetically deep meaning, and the imagery is Godly...
    much Love, and keep in touch,
    shalini
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      My favourite lines in this poem were:

    "And togetherness is
    the rainbow across the sky
    The light always found
    in the gleam of our eye"

    It seems almost every thing they view connects thems - the rainbow, stretches from one expanse to the other, each side held by the hands of the seperate, it is like holding hands through a sky road of colour.

    The light, emerging from the sun, is like a signal, like morse code for the eye. It sends a message in its appearing and disappearing. By day, a message arrives, by night, the meditation on the message.

    This was a great poem Tiff, I loved it. I'm glad to see you're getting more opportunities to write and post your poetry, because we missed you in your absence.
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Tiff,

    This has a beautiful rhythm and flow. You've captured the mood of how we're always in touch with a loved one. Nice!

    Most of all the ocean plays rhythm
    and it sounds like sea shells
    are sanding away
    at everyone's reservations,
    to be loving,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      lovely... i like it. i really love to read your work. keep posting so that i may keep reading. no one really posts that much good stuff anymore. i'm glad you're still at it.


    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany
    You did a fantastic job with this one
    Your use of the words used creates a Peaceful serene scene in ones mind
    I really liked this
    As with all your poetry this write has a beautiful message to enjoy life and live it in the Positive
    The Lord has created much beautiful creations for us to enjoy so we can easily live life in the Positive
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful.
    perfect..
    this says it all.

    . stilling an ocean beach,
    what i gorgeous picture you;ve painted for us.
    it's all about a moment in time..

    a fave,

    love allways,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      What a wonderfull and endearing write this is. Full of love, and full of emotion. Let us hope this 'King' and 'Queen' continue to bask in the glory of true love.

    Love always finds a way !!!

    Celtic King.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful tif!! The imagery and the emotions are phenominal. I really just wanted to weep. Ah love......

    Keep up the amazing writes cause I'll never get tired of reading them.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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