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    dots Submission Name: When The Rope Snaps...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Rant/Them
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1125



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       mmm So many things I've just found out... About my family.. that just makes me want to roll back over in bed every morning.. shaking my head thinking... no no this isn't happening but it is. and this is life...


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    dots When The Rope Snaps...dots
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    You feel as if you can tell me all you long to release..
    To let go of it all when I am near..
    Yes you can confide in me,
    Don't get me wrong
    But somethings you just don't tell your daughter
    Like the nasty things he's done to you
    Or how he treats you..
    (like nothing more than the ground he walks benath)
    Then...
    Now...
    Is when the center of the rope as a great amount of tention
    Stuck in the middle as usual
    With the two of you pulling
    Lying to me
    Bribbing me
    No longer am I your daughter
    Simply a prize the other shall raise up.. with honor
    Once this rope snaps!
    Shit's going to hit the fan!
    This relation we like to call a family ...
    Will no longer be that
    Simply broken pieces we shall pick up
    And with teamwork..
    Effort
    Goals...
    We can get this all back together..
    Nevertheless
    This rope has yet to snap ..
    But when it dose
    Don't come running for cover..
    You've been warned




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 12:12:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha, this is great, I really like the part where [censored]'s gonna hit the fan, lol
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]


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