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    Author: babygirl09
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 69/63/49
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 755
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1012



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       I don't really know where I got the idea for this, It jus kinda came to my head... I'm havin a lotta mixed emotions right now...


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    I look at your face from across the hall
    My breath catches as I feel weak to my knees
    You walk right up to me
    But ignore me
    The usual numbness washes over me
    I try to call
    But you just hang up
    I try to talk
    But my mouth feels like it's full of cotton
    I try to write
    But my hand shakes too bad I can't get a grip
    There's nothing left to do
    I've run out of time
    I remember when you said I love you
    And my heart would nearly burst
    When you held me so tight
    I still felt like I could fly
    I would cry on your shoulder
    And you never cared
    With my eye liner and mascara
    Staining your shirt
    I would fall asleep in your arms
    And you never complained
    But when you asked me to marry you
    I freaked and walked away
    I realize now
    That I made a fucking huge mistake
    And I'm left here
    With no one to blame




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 15:03:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow! that's really good! very, very sad, but good.
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by T. Garrett | [ Reply to This ]
      Great Write As Alwaiiz
    The Saying Is True U Dont Really Know Just What You Have Untill Youve Lost It
    And If Ur Lucky Like Me You Get A Second Chance But You Spend Everyday Hoping Not To Make The Same Mistake And [censored] it All Up Again
    But Its Great Lizzie Keep It Up
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]


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