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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Written as a poetry exercise from my lit teacher. We all got two or more random words and we had to write a poem. This one had to be four lines. My words were lie and devoted.


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    If you see me, head down, eyes burning
    Don't talk to me; I'm living a lie
    Devoted to an obscure cause called truth
    Don't speak; actions speak louder; actions don't lie




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 23:05:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish I had your lit teacher...College sucks...lol.

    This is very awesome...and I dont' mean that in the surfer-dude type of awesome. I mean it has great presence. It's simple ...it's only four lines, but it has great presence...

    I like the concept...lies and truth and actions speaking louder than words.

    I like this alot...Favorites!

    -Sennie.
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Drifting Star | [ Reply to This ]


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