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    dots Submission Name: Haikudots
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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
    Total Views: 973
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    Bytes: 77



    Description:
       A third lit exercise. This one had to be a haiku, and my words were read, twisted, and arm.


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    dotsHaikudots
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    You'll read about me
    How I twisted the arm
    Of the universe




    Submitted on 2007-03-07 23:09:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good work.
    I read the syllable count as 5-6-5. Good to step to the side of traditional formats.
    The recomended break, at the end of the first line was clear and worked to your advantage.
    A good portrayal of egotistical and direct manipulation.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm. Seems almost profound..
    Me likes the twist.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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