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    dots Submission Name: Lost Optimismdots
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    Author: Lukas B
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 5/5/9
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    Description:
       Poetry is too often associated with depression and negative feelings. I prefer something I feel passionate about to make me happy. Yes I have written about my depressions but find a rhyme that can express your positive feelings and you'll see a poem unfold that will let u walk with your chin raised, and your confidence praised.


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    dotsLost Optimismdots
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    I am not depressed
    Perhaps I'm socially opressed
    Yet I still walk with a smile
    My laughter lasts a while
    My life will never end
    My love will love my friends
    My friends will love my love
    And my Parents will love again.

    It is not my desire,
    to see humans expire.
    It is not in my best interest,
    To see my peers depressed.
    I do not enjoy pain,
    No more then freezing rain.

    I refuse to end my life,
    or cut my wrists in vein.
    If I were to hurt myself,
    I would displease my brain.

    If I didn't say I love you,
    You shouldn't feel exempt.
    For I have love for all,
    Other then those who can't accept.

    If It's your fault you must admit,
    before pain finds your path.
    I've never felt worse pain,
    than Karma and its wrath.

    However, now I'm optimistic,
    I'm happy as can be.
    I can use words like nonshalant,
    And better yet use glee.

    We should not look for the worst,
    We should stumble upon the best.
    If you see a golden herse,
    You'll see my pain at rest.




    Submitted on 2007-03-08 03:07:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nice to see something optimistic once in awhile. I enjoyed the simplicity of it and well the flow of it. nice job
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      Optimism Lost is truthful. Usually a flow as this would be too basic for me. But for worth of the words that you do use, and the subject, it fits perfectly, because it has sort of a melancholy, yet emotionally feel to it i like. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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