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Nothing more to look forward to
but a void
in life and in love.
I recognize my being
as the crying face in the mirror.
My eyes glazed with tears
every breath stabbing like a spear.
It physically hurts to live without you.
There is nothing more to look forward to.
Only more tears from me
and no more smiles from you.
| I totally agree with "silverscent" ...and I’ve read so much poems about the same subject , but each one had its own way of being special , I liked the line " no more smiles from you " ... coz a smile is really a symbol of warmth love and affection ...good job||| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ] || That was a very simple write, but very sad and touching.|
The language and format in general was straightforward, and in a way minimal. Yet the effect was far from it. The subtleness was heart wrenching and the last two lines especially were powerful.
The basic ideas "crying," "tears" and "love" were common (cliché) words, and I'd normally suggest a more creative alternative, but I don't think creativity was the primary object of this poem. Just emotion. And it was emotional.
Thanks for sharing.
|| Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ] |