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    dots Submission Name: Howdots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    Description:
       hmmm...well this is one of my older poems. I'm not ever really sure if it is a poem or was I just venting? Oh well.Here it is.Also I'm not really sure if I spelled "inevitable" right so if anyone reaads this & knows how to spell it could you tell me if I did. Thanks!


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    dotsHowdots
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    I sigh and know I've lost this battle.
    I've lost this battle called love.
    I begin to realize
    that you love her more than you ever could me.
    It was inevitable
    this heartbreak I feel now.
    But oe thing keeps repeating in my mind,
    How?
    How could I have been so foolish?
    How could I have thought
    you could ever love me?
    How could I have been
    such a fool to actaully believe you?
    My heart's putting up walls now.
    It's tired of being hurt
    and frankly,
    so am I.




    Submitted on 2007-03-08 09:16:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see this as more as a rant....if was a poem it would need alot of tweaking os im going to call it a rant.....love something dat will never be understood....n that sucks but life a [censored]...... I like the way u express ur feelings n how u wonder to ur self why would i belive him..

    well hope to hear from ya n keep writing.

    Max
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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