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    dots Submission Name: One Act Playdots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       I wrote this for my now ex-boyfriend but I was with him at the time. I did eventually tell him how I felt, the second time we went out, and he did just like I thought he would. He freaked out because I guess I love him and he doesn't want me to. I don't know but he left me.


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    dotsOne Act Playdots
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    I sit here crying silently
    alone in my room.
    I don't know what to do.
    I don't want to leave you.
    Though I wouldn't stay single long,
    to leave you would break my heart in two.

    You hug me every day
    but those hugs feel emotionless.
    Like you've forced yourself
    to hug me.
    I just want you to be happy.
    Even if that means you leaving me.

    Confidence turns to doubt
    as sadness continously adds
    weight to my already heavy heart.
    My heart frequently cries out for help,
    Wishing to feel your love caress it.
    It's waiting to be saved,
    to be kept safe by someone
    who will love it forever.

    I put on an act
    so noone worries about me.
    Everyday I act
    happy and joyful.
    Everyday I'm really
    sad and sorrowful.
    I'm afraid if I tell you how I truly feel
    you'll get mad and yell at me.

    Why wont someone save me?
    Why aren't you saving me?
    I want this act to end.
    I want to be
    Happy and joyful again.




    Submitted on 2007-03-08 09:35:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Emotions are what great poets use to write with but have to remember form and structure. You have done that, If you continue to write you're work will evolve you already have a great start for a writer your age. I'll check out more of your work.

    Cogito, Ergo Sum

    Christopher
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]


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