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    dots Submission Name: Sightdots
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    Author: Dolor
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 62/83/49
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsSightdots
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    In the black of Night
    I hear evil voices,
    I hear screams of fright,
    But of these fears the worst is
    Sight.

    --

    On the ground, crawling
    I close my eyes.
    My world is falling,
    Around the voices, calling.

    Curiosity fatigues me,
    My eyes creep open.
    And what my eyes see,
    Is nothing which you’d believe.




    Submitted on 2007-03-08 15:09:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice ideas and concept regarding sight. I eyes can see only what exist in mind. Illusions and magic play tricks on the mind.

    This poem will improve if you ask deeper questions in your mind. What does sight mean to you and how does it affect world around us. This poem has lots of potential. Give it some time and the poem will speak to you, and then you shall reply.

    The most effective poems written uses imagery(smell, taste, touch, sight and sound)
    | Posted on 2007-12-31 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a question more than anything here Dolor. Why, in the first stanza, do you put the word 'sight' on its own line, then keep the same rhyme scheme for the poem and make everything else only quatrains?
    Have yo considered following suit on the other two stanzas? Putting the last word of each stanza on its own line as well? Just a thought.
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]



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