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Grab It By The Balls


Author: MornSweetSong
ASL Info:    21/female/wales
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Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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I will overcome...


Grab It By The Balls



If depression were a colour, it would be twelve shades of blue.
Perhaps a hint of purple and black, and an angry reddish hue.

If depression were a feeling, it would be of mortal despair.
Your insides turn themselves to stone, I soon forget to care.

If depression were a picture it would be a dragons lair,
A hollow, stinking cave, I'd be the only person there.

Depression is the savage beast who consumes my every thought.
Im sick to death of his control, I wish I could abort.

One day I may just catch him when he's on his way to me,
I'll squeeze his balls until he falls and finally be free




Submitted on 2007-03-08 17:42:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Lol finally something that is funny! and at the same time, I enjoyed it very much! nice piece..
| Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting, quiet interesting display of emotions. In fact, I must say that it was a powerful display of emotions.

It is true that depression can mean all those things and then maybe some more. It is one painful experience to anyone who is suffering or has suffered from it. There can be reasons as to why it happens but I do not know of that. I mean after all there are those optimistic people right? Who cannot me moved even by some near Ragnarok like catastrophe. So, I sometimes wish I was like them.

I guess it would have been nice to just not a feel a thing. All emotions, numbed to the point where nothing matters. Then again I think that is the beauty of it. The ability to feel and that some of us probably feel too much. There is nothing that is happening in this world that can be labeled positive and joyful.

Yet these emotions make people stand out. Perhaps, I feel too much or maybe even talk too much at times. But you cannot deny the magic of those tiny neurones that make you feel ecstatic at times and mournful at other times. I guess that is what differentiates us from an inanimate object.

I might have been rambling for awhile. Wait, I was. So I shall end it right here. Before I do I will like say some things about the poem.

The last stanza; I wish you had written it a little different. I read the title as "Grab it by the bells". Hence I was very intrigued to read it. Then once I finished reading the poem, I realized what the title was. Of course I am glad I read the title as I did, other wise I might have not read it. I don't know why but it just spoils my empathy flow at the last line.

That is it I suppose. Feel better. God bless.

peace and empathy,
| Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by forestspirit | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice poem. I really liked it. Don't listen to Clarkie.
The "If depression were" bits were necessary for the descriptiveness (if that's a word) of depression. The only thing I probably would have changed would be were to was as it just seems to click better in my head that way. All in all, I thought it was a great poem. I loved the end. ;)
| Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
  haha. very homorous. very entertaining and very true. depression can be all those things and so much more. being apathetic to the world and all. ahh... depression. anyway, overall, the piece was well written. i was begining to think that by the way this poem was going it would eventually end in a very serious, striking phrase. something that would put the dot the period black and thick to a sentence so well thought out. i was wrong. yes it was striking and yes the ending did give closure, but the humor, the humor was brilliant. cheers!

kat
| Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
  I udnerstand what you were trying here, I'm just not sure it works. It comes off juvenille and angsty, rather than as a window into a very real emotion. The phrasing seems childish, while the subject matter is not. There's jsut something about it that's grating.

Thry making it feel less like spearate sentences about depression that you happened to string together, and more like a cohesive unit. And don't start every line with 'if depression were' as it's repetitive.
| Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Clarkie | [ Reply to This ]
  That was really good, and a little funny. Although, I don't think it was supposed to be funny. It was a very serious type poem, with great vocabulary might I add. I didn't get happy til the end, and as I was reading it, one thing popped into my head; me. I can relate very well to this, and the way you described it was amazing. This was very original. Definetely worth adding to my favorites.

~Piper

PS: Oh and by the way, great title. It kind of stands out. It outa attract a lot of people eventually.
| Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]


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