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    dots Submission Name: Dreamsdots
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    Author: Nani
    ASL Info:    14/Female
    Elite Ratio:    7.23 - 108/46/19
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 613



    Description:
       This is the first poem I've written for like ever. I just wrote it so I would get more used to poetry. I know it's corny and everything, but I'll write about something that isn't so... corny. And I just wrote this in 5 min so just bare with me people.. o.O. I had no idea what I should have for the title, so any suggestions would be welcome!


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    dotsDreamsdots
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    Looking into your soft eyes
    I can see a part of me that I’ve lost
    A part that nobody can figure out

    But here you stand beside me
    Holding me tightly against you
    Telling me that everything will be okay

    Touching your soft face
    I could feel warmth all over my body
    I know that I will be protected

    But slowly you fade away
    Moving back into the distance
    Floating towards the ocean colored sky

    Soon I wake up
    To find that you’re not with me
    You never were
    And you never will




    Submitted on 2007-03-08 22:40:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the flow and form of this poem
    my favorite line is:
    Floating towards the ocean colored sky.
    Nice wrie.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      for a poem written in five minutes, i would say you did a tremendous job. i did not think it was corny either...

    i flowed very well from what i thought was reality... but instead ended as a dream.

    like a slow.. poof.

    i liked it a lot :) good job



    -Samantha
    -slickviper097
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]



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