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    dots Submission Name: Forgotten Lovedots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1033
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 542



    Description:
       I'm not sure about that name. If you have any ideas please let me know.
    This just popped into my head while I was in World History. I don't know why though. Tell me what you think.


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    dotsForgotten Lovedots
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    You're the shining of my sun,
    My moon in the nights sky.
    The smile on my face,
    The reason that I try.

    The day that you left,
    My skies all turned to grey.
    The moon shattered to pieces,
    All my smiles went away.

    I miss you everyday,
    Wishing to have you back.
    Wondering what she has,
    And what it is I lack.

    I think about how I lost you,
    And regret it all the time.
    I would give anything,
    For you to just be mine.




    Submitted on 2007-03-09 09:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved it thsi is an awesome write
    -Cheyenne-
    | Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by Chafinky | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so sad!
    i liked the flow ofthe rhyme scheme, and how thie write portrayed a stronger feeling that is otherwise hard to describe. good job.
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. The lines all flow and make sence. Deep poem and very strong. A+
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]


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