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    dots Submission Name: Do you have All the Answersdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 734
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    Bytes: 756



    Description:
       ... I question.. so much... Never NeVeR can I find the answer I long to find!


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    dotsDo you have All the Answersdots
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    Can you tell me, where I'll be in 20 years?
    I long to know my future
    Staying up all hours
    Questioning every possible issue
    Never happy with either the answer I've found
    Or the dead end, I seem to have become fimilar with.
    Wanting, longing to be confurable
    with the unknown
    Yet I have to ask
    How can such a person be so
    non-chalant
    About their own future...
    Nevertheless the unknown
    I seem to be going in circles
    With myself
    Such as a dog, trying to grab their tale
    These questions seem endless
    Always lasting
    One after the other
    Yet the irony of it all
    These, games of questioning
    Are endless...




    Submitted on 2007-03-09 09:44:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What person at a young age thinks like dat....like me im going to jail for long time im always wondering where ill be in 20 years.....It just somthing u shoudl't stress about thing happen for a reason at a certain time....that why life will always be mysterious...the only i would change on this piece was the sentence

    "Such as a dog, trying to grab their tale "

    I think it would sound better if it was like

    "Such as a dog, chasing there tale"

    well that me n this is ur peice but yea
    well i hope i hear from ya n keep up th egood work...

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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