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    dots Submission Name: This Life I live...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 850



    Description:
       uhh... little do they know. The pain I live with... the pain I have been ignoring...


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    dotsThis Life I live...dots
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    Look into my eyes
    May I ask
    What do you see?

    Do you see
    What others ignore?

    Or can you see
    What they pretend to not see

    Do these hazle eyes
    Tell you a story

    Not even I could tell!

    And yet I've lived
    The story my eyes decribe to you

    The darkness seeps in
    And the story begins

    With me, a young naive innocent girl

    This story...
    Life...

    Soon ends with a young women
    Strung out on drugs..

    With a lose of innocence...
    No longer that young naive little girl

    Whom was once decribed to you..

    There's not much to it
    Take a look into these eyes..

    Then you'll know it all!




    Submitted on 2007-03-09 09:52:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your eyes must say a lot about you, lol. Hey, my eyes are hazel! But I aint a girl =p
    | Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Do I love those eyes! Baby, you have changed my world in ways you may never know. Thank you so much for everything that makes you who you are. This is the poem that I picked to add to my favorite list. It is about something very dear to me. Your eyes, and the story that they tell. I love you "poo eyes"!

    -Dave
    | Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by Wired | [ Reply to This ]
       thats a great poem . ive known a lot of people like that and i was/am like that too. i turned to drugs....BIG mistake... but its just the choice some people make. anyway great peom keep it up!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem describes so many people i know...it could easily have described me last year but i guess things have changed a lot. i really like it a lot.
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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