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Dream For Two


Author: Reckoner
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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never used for the project, that it shoulda..but love was the feeling I still got across to her, my utmost desire


Dream For Two



This dream
a dream of two
spotless
he sees me
but these curls lack something obvious

softening brain matter
my failures trap me
what I have always lacked
seals me inside a big black grin
even as he now approaches me

'Lets eat
lets dine
lets address the fear in our spines
taste our sins together
and feed on
forever'

this dream table
a table full
of empty tasting food

sitting on the side nearest to danger
the black hole in the wall looks me over
whispers the obscene
while my lover smiles from afar
then looks his dinner over

'My love
why don't you eat
feed your fingers
make this meal your best
cause it might just be the last bit of heaven
you ever get to taste'

a reverberation in my sheet metal frame
cold glare from a guilty soul
will that fork ever touch his mouth
or will it eventually just fade
become that distance that supports us now

'Lets dive into warmth
indulge ourselves in transient residue
soap bubbles
and talk of destiny
these rough times
we will soon wash off and be free'

this dream tub
several bubbles
popping against my lonely knee

the dream contains two
only if I imagine him
then I let him in
there he slowly becomes
the perfect feeling I wish to be

eloquent and always on time
two descriptions of his verse
his loving echoes rest inside my chest
just the right moment to save me
the only words that could of ever saved me

you call this a vibrant lie
you call living through someone else's eyes unjustified
invisible
he will continue to cloak his thoughts and mine
till daybreak finds a quiet place to bring are lives together




Submitted on 2007-03-09 15:19:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah, that was my own stupidity still...should have emailed it to myself....of just kept your email open in my mailbox...gah... :*( didnt get used, but still it was felt. i love you. Thank you bebs

XOxoXO,
me
| Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]


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