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    dots Submission Name: until i'm bitterdots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1263
    Average Vote:    4.7500
    Bytes: 696



    Description:
       haha yea i final did something with that set of lines


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsuntil i'm bitterdots
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    This is my signature disease

    My soul is starving
    But my heart is bulimic
    Binge and purge until Iím bitter
    Until Iím better

    I pull myself together
    Crawl across the tile
    Away from the porcine gods I pray to
    I turned caffeine into religion
    Because I was too sick to sleep
    But now I canít wake up

    Binge and purge until Iím better

    Can you tell?

    My soul is starving
    But my heart is bulimic

    I hate it when they tell me Iím pretty
    Because thereís so much ugly inside
    Always wanting to be better

    Binge and purge




    Submitted on 2007-03-09 16:03:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great poem, you are an amazing writer and it's good to find someone who knows what the monster inside all of us is like. Like how do we tame it? Can it be tamed? No it can't but it can be leashed, but it must be faced and beaten, so our evil sides can be oversome, but it is ard so let us both wish the other blessings in doing so, in facing our evil sides and may God give us the strength to defeat them. Now I am not preaching you and I do not really want ot offend you with my faith but it is part of who i am. So I can't apologze for believing it but I can if it is too harsh.
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
      I swore I commented this- but lo and behold: no comment from me! Boooooo!!! -I know I read it before...

    "Binge and purge until Iím bitter, until Iím better" -Oh, the many ways I love this line!!! Let me count them; One-one thousand, two-one thousand, three-one thousand... etc...

    "I hate it when they tell me Iím pretty because thereís so much ugly inside..." *hugggs* Damn, this is a powerful piece... Way to go for you!!!
    Just hard-core awesome!

    I love the single line start and end you used here, too.

    You got a lot of comments on this one- rock on!
    You're so pretty! Oh, wait!!! I'm not susposed to say that!!! Ahhhh, ummmmmmmmmmm... You're so... ... ... well-dressed?

    *love & light*

    -Ceyx
    | Posted on 2008-04-06 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]
      ya know when i first read this i had to read it again

    i really like it
    i didnt quite get it at first
    (but ya you know im slow like that lol)

    but when i did i just sat there and soaked it in
    i love your work!

    ily
    truthbetold
    | Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a very well writien poem.
    i cant explain it bet for somereason i felt
    little like u were finding urself....not the words i wanted but still i like it
    | Posted on 2007-07-20 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this Writing To Death,
    it leaves me gasping.
    such a place for Dark Beauty and Depression
    everyword is so formatted into Precision of on going words.

    The Part that catches me the most, is when you talked about caffiene being a religion.
    made me smile...
    fav. addiction.
    | Posted on 2007-05-26 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
      "I pull myself together
    Crawl across the tile
    Away from the porcine gods I pray to
    I turned caffeine into religion
    Because I was too sick to sleep
    But now I canít wake up"

    Now that is [censored] powereful. And completely relatable. Been there done that sort of thing.
    Hell yeah, keep it up, and Rock the [censored] on.

    -The Silenced Poet
    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by Silenced poet | [ Reply to This ]
      i know ive comented this before but i came back and read it again and it still resonates so i want you to knows its lovely and brilliant..
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Binge and Purge on what ;-) hahaha

    well... this is very good. Email me sometime. I gotta lot to say.

    Psykosolution@yahoo.com
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      You show alot of yourself in this. i don't know you that well, but this still moves me. I would like to make sort of a spin off this poem would that be okay if i could quote the whole "my soul is starving, but my heart is bullimic" type thing, i like that line it has a ring to me. I hope you feel you can feel better after awhile.
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this for the sickest reasons which i wont disclose to you because you are a stranger.. har har. but the important thing is that i loved it.. or thats whats important to me. perhaps not to you since you dont know me so why should it matter? but if it does then im glad and if not oh well.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      my heart's anorexic. it's starving itself to death in this world. i enjoyed this piece quite a bit. inner strggles breed a fever and a coldness that only the winter knows as love...
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWW. this is so sad. But a very good write. It showed a lot of emotion.
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. The very first section is my favourite. i love how you've used bulimia to describe how you feel about your heart. it works very well. I also really like the play on words, with bitter and better. there is a lot of emotion in this piece, well done. You seem really good at reaching into yourself and finding something in the form of words. that is very hard to do.
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by astrangedream | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting. i liked this write a lot, it looks like a free verse
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]


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