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    dots Submission Name: Dear Mum *finally revised*dots
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    Author: babytinkerbelle
    ASL Info:    26/f/aus
    Elite Ratio:    5.25 - 310/209/42
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Finally I got around to updating this, it's my Mum's birthday tomorrow and I wanted to finish this so I could give it to her, let me know what you think guys.


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    dotsDear Mum *finally revised*dots
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    Dear Mum,

    I know how hard it had been for you to raise us all by yourself, you had no help and very little Ďthank yousí. My entire life, Iíve wanted to make you proud to be the fourth of five children, I really wanted to stand out, to make you proud, Iím older now and starting to understand what it is to be an adult.
    Iíve had my heart broken and you were there to pick up the pieces.
    Iíve lost jobs and you were there to reassure me that I am worthwhile.

    Over the years we have had our differences, when I was younger, people used to tell me that one day I wouldnít just see you as my mum, that I would see you as a friend, I never believed them, but, over the past few years, I have started truly seeing you as not just my mother but probably as one of the best friends I will ever have.

    Iíll never forget all the little things you have done for me, from washing my clothes to letting me just cry because I needed a shoulder.

    You are the best Mum anyone could ever have, I am truly lucky to have you.

    I love you Mum, I know I rarely ever say that, I rarely ever hug or kiss you to let you know that I love you, I'm not good at showing affection, but I hope you see, through the little things I do, that I love you more than anyone and truly appreciate everything you do for me.

    Love

    Lynda




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      Oh, I think if you mum hasn't read this yet, she would absolutely LOVE it! It touched my heart because most of it was true about me and my mom.

    It really made me think that I should do something special for her because we rarely see each other. Thanks for opening my eyes.

    Love it,
    [Lisa]
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]


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