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    dots Submission Name: By Candlelightdots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 731
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsBy Candlelightdots

    A single flame
    Burns atop the wick,
    Light among shadows linger,
    Wavering brick blinks
    As air caresses the flame.
    It whirls around the room
    Reminiscence of a soul,
    Plastered human urn.
    Spectra of light
    Bends and twirls
    As wick disappears into wax,
    Forever knowing fire
    Burn stern and clear.
    Out of the darkness
    Streaks a white moth
    Attracted to desire,
    Dust from it's wings rain
    Head long into the flame.
    A burst of light
    The moth is gone,
    Leaving fairy dust
    A reminder
    To those who lust
    And ache to long
    For the flame
    To consume us.

    Submitted on 2007-03-09 21:24:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good Job! You can count this poem as good as favorited! I really like how you paint a picture in the reader's mind. 5/5 I say
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ryu Saiashi | [ Reply to This ]
      Intriguing. Intense. Your style is unique. Very picturesque and hectic. Also, I like the way you combine your lines and your diction. I'd say you have talent and that you should use it as much as you can because this page needs a good reading material and I just got myself a new favourite :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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