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    dots Submission Name: Greetings From the Rimdots
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    Author: Jason_Clement
    ASL Info:    17, male
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 147/149/61
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Greetings From the Rim
    © Jason C. Clement

    I saw an angel burning bright,
    As pale as the moonlight;
    She sang a song of hope, of fear
    That drew me near.
    Her voice, it carried with the wind,
    Drove me mad, turned my mind to sin;
    Enchanting gaze, brought me to my knees,
    With one black kiss, my soul she seized.

    Follow on the path forever, son,
    The voices call, they beg you to come,
    Follow the words wherever they lead,
    Just give into the hand that feeds.

    The temptress disappeared into the water,
    With a stir, I quickly forgot her;
    Madness took, as I fell to the river,
    As I drowned, sanity it withered.
    Then before me, stood a mirror,
    Inside it, the thing I fear;
    The voices whispered, and dance around,
    No other souls here, not one other sound.

    This is your time, whether you Devil or Christ,
    Evils unspeakable, illusions of your own device;
    Slap the vein, and let the poison seep through you,
    Your life now dependant on what you choose.

    The voices, faceless, surrounded like a council,
    "You there, shameless; why'd you wish us killed?"
    Then pictures housing memories, flew 'bout my head,
    And in that instant, it hit me, all the dread.
    That moment lasted a lifetime, then ended like a game,
    Out of the corner of my eye, the angel came;
    She took my hand and whsipered; "Greetings from the Rim"
    And in her eyes I saw escape, I saw the end.

    by Jason C. Clement
    "Greetings From the Rim"
    © Jason C. Clement




    Submitted on 2007-03-09 22:26:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Jason
    Another Incredible write from you
    In this write I believe you are taking us your readers on a TRIP into an addicts mind
    And letting us know exactly what happens to those who indulge in the Devils juice
    I really Loved the way you put this one together
    I speak from experience when I say you really nailed the feeling perfectly
    EXCELLENT JOB
    Im looking forward to seeing more writes from you soon
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-06-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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