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    dots Submission Name: We were fine until something came alongdots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWe were fine until something came alongdots
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    We were fine until something came along


    Nothing at all
    Matches to him
    Not even God
    But heís a God to you
    its a blatant fixation
    And a obvious fascination
    And your obsessions donít
    Do anything for me
    Because
    We were fine
    Until your fixation came along
    We were fine until something
    Came along
    And ruined the vibe


    Nothing in the world
    Matches my jealousy
    To your God
    Of Gods
    Itís a amazing
    How quickly you can
    Forget me
    And all the things
    I meant to you
    But I come to expect this
    Because
    We were fine
    Until he came along




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      O.o How wonderful. This poem is excellent. Original. Beautiful! Good Job!
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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