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    dots Submission Name: We were fine until something came alongdots

    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWe were fine until something came alongdots

    We were fine until something came along

    Nothing at all
    Matches to him
    Not even God
    But heís a God to you
    its a blatant fixation
    And a obvious fascination
    And your obsessions donít
    Do anything for me
    We were fine
    Until your fixation came along
    We were fine until something
    Came along
    And ruined the vibe

    Nothing in the world
    Matches my jealousy
    To your God
    Of Gods
    Itís a amazing
    How quickly you can
    Forget me
    And all the things
    I meant to you
    But I come to expect this
    We were fine
    Until he came along

    Submitted on 2007-03-10 10:52:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      O.o How wonderful. This poem is excellent. Original. Beautiful! Good Job!
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]

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