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    dots Submission Name: What Would It Be Like To Hold Youdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 726
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 970



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       Who know who this is for....so it's all good


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    dotsWhat Would It Be Like To Hold Youdots
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    "Sittin here...

    Tring to think what to write bout dis girl....
    thats whats wrong,
    im thinking with my head
    not my heart..."

    So where should I start..

    I don't want to rush things
    but its eating me inside n out
    not knowing what we could of been....
    PRETTY then n PRETTY Now
    Its amazing your Voice still makes me weak
    Somthing never change
    I would exchange anything
    From my looks to saying fuck the crew
    just to see what would of happened between me n you...

    Im just tring to stay true...
    Unlike your other so called Boo's
    I ain't got nothin to lose
    From the bottom of my heart is true
    I will always stay loyal to you....

    I rather have you has a friend,
    Then nothin at all........

    You know who you are...... If u think im trippin just tell me....




    Submitted on 2007-03-10 11:13:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. Its unique, but it makes sense. You have a wonderful writing gift and obviously been through a lot. I really like your writing style. After editing this it could be so much more amazing. Good Job. I look forward to reading more. <3
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, it needs edit but i got it, try using "word" if you got it. passion and love are very hard to write about. poe
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry - the minute you started with the hip-hop terminology you lost me - not cuz I ain't fly with it, homey, but just cuz it's lazy and clichéd. Why bother when the standard usage of english works so well?

    Rap and hip-hop as art-forms in their own right, absolutely.
    Rap and hip-hop just thrown into what others write -
    absolutely not.

    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]


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