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    dots Submission Name: What Would It Be Like To Hold Youdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 693
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 970

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    dotsWhat Would It Be Like To Hold Youdots

    "Sittin here...

    Tring to think what to write bout dis girl....
    thats whats wrong,
    im thinking with my head
    not my heart..."

    So where should I start..

    I don't want to rush things
    but its eating me inside n out
    not knowing what we could of been....
    PRETTY then n PRETTY Now
    Its amazing your Voice still makes me weak
    Somthing never change
    I would exchange anything
    From my looks to saying fuck the crew
    just to see what would of happened between me n you...

    Im just tring to stay true...
    Unlike your other so called Boo's
    I ain't got nothin to lose
    From the bottom of my heart is true
    I will always stay loyal to you....

    I rather have you has a friend,
    Then nothin at all........

    You know who you are...... If u think im trippin just tell me....

    Submitted on 2007-03-10 11:13:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. Its unique, but it makes sense. You have a wonderful writing gift and obviously been through a lot. I really like your writing style. After editing this it could be so much more amazing. Good Job. I look forward to reading more. <3
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, it needs edit but i got it, try using "word" if you got it. passion and love are very hard to write about. poe
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry - the minute you started with the hip-hop terminology you lost me - not cuz I ain't fly with it, homey, but just cuz it's lazy and clichéd. Why bother when the standard usage of english works so well?

    Rap and hip-hop as art-forms in their own right, absolutely.
    Rap and hip-hop just thrown into what others write -
    absolutely not.

    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]

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