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    dots Submission Name: In here firstdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIn here firstdots
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    Am I dissolving into you
    or are you expanding into me?
    I can never quite tell.
    You are the darkness
    and yet you feel so bright.
    Maybe I am blinded
    by the dazzling beauty of you.
    You are complete stillness,
    silently resting my soul in peace;
    and yet you are a torrent of joy
    waking every cell in my body.
    You are a pillar of unity
    where all potential exists
    and all possibilites
    live in harmony.
    You are the loving embrace,
    the arms of acceptance
    that envelop all that I am.
    You are a window of opportunity
    open to me.
    I am merely a stumbling student.
    Teach me.




    Submitted on 2007-03-10 11:13:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Each person that we choose to deal with has many small effects on us. Occaionally we encounter that person whose influence can border on overwhelming. It is then up to us to decide just how much of this influence to adopt and just what to let go out of hand.
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      I really don't want to be unkind, but this seems so....generic...

    There is nothing that stands out in it. We have all been to extremes of physical and mental boundaries with people, but I just don't think it's enough.

    Sorry.

    Just ignore me and remember that without rainclouds there'd be no rainbows.

    peace'n'love'n'stuff

    Ben Gunn
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]


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