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    dots Submission Name: never again...dots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 454
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 309



    Description:
       just bored. a tune came to my head and these are the words that followed... pretty flippin' sweet i think


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    dotsnever again...dots
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    stop chasing me
    cuz im not
    running anymore
    ive locked the door
    im on the other side
    no one can get in
    never again...
    never again...

    not today
    and not tomorrow
    you cant just borrow
    my heart
    stop tearing it
    apart




    Submitted on 2007-03-10 12:51:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi, well it looks you got some fee fie foe bum commits, better than none. again not a bad write. you can only get better, i suggest it not us, "stop tearing it apart", poe
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      too generic. Sorry. It just meant jack to me. It could be any number of bad lyrics by bad bands. I will, however, try to read some of your other stuff as this may not be representative of your overall ability. sorry to be so negative, but hey - there's no rainbows without rainclouds.
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is alright.... U should but some metaphoric words in there describe what has happened what going on ... stuff like that but i like the part

    "not today
    and not tomorrow
    you cant just borrow
    my heart
    stop tearing us
    apart"


    well hope ot hear from ya n keep up the good work...

    Max
    aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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