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    dots Submission Name: Disfunction.... has more than just ONE meaning!!dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 617
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       uhhh.... i want to wake up and it all be gone!


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    dotsDisfunction.... has more than just ONE meaning!!dots
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    How did we get to be so dysfunctional?
    How did we fall apart like this?
    One year things are great
    We all sit
    We eat dinner together
    At the same time
    Has much has I seem to hate it
    I suppose I loved it all
    I'd walk in from school
    "How was your day"?
    A simply yet meaningful question....
    From whom was a caring parent?
    Now they simply bicker..
    As I pass them in that
    Very same room...
    Let me in on this secret... please...
    PLEASE...
    I beg of you?
    I know we cannot rewind what has went wrong
    But we shall try to mend it all together...
    STOP! Stop your yelling...
    YES... you STOP...
    And you...
    Your my Mother..
    Stop smoking that weed...
    Stop... being a mooch!
    Please ... I need you now more than ever...
    Everything is...
    Is...
    Spinning out of control...
    And I can't handle much more of it




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    ||| Comments |||
      You have very strong feelings and the anger and confusion is not only present in the words, but in the structure of your peom. It's really strong. You could try writing a peom with less confusion in the structure because that takes away from the words a little bit.
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]
      You have very strong feelings and the anger and confusion is not only present in the words, but in the structure of your peom. It's really strong. You could try writing a peom with less confusion in the structure because that takes away from the words a little bit.
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. you kind of bounced back with that one. I think a lot of us have been there, and you have to realise that it isn't you. Adults screw up just like their offspring, and adults DON'T have all the answers.

    Rely on yourself. You're the only one you can count on.

    Raw, upsetting, and good.
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]


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