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Author: darkwiccan14
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Comedy
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william...just saying...u!


A guy named william,
Such a weird and strange guy,
But still wishes to make trillians',
But all he is a baker with a pie.
We helped him all we could,
Spending money,
All the money that we would,
It seems a bit funny,
That we've done this deed,
At least we have planted this tree's seed.
OH william!
With you I am,
A broken heart with a pennyless record...

Submitted on 2007-03-10 19:23:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it a funny piece, but i don't get it. It's a 'you've had to have been there' thing, right? lol
| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree... I like pie. Read my poems
| Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
  uhm. i'm not really sure as to what this piece is about. but... i must admit. it is entertaining. =]

| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by AdrienneCale | [ Reply to This ]

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